Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is true that the subjects which are related to science and technology would be useful in the future because of economic growth. From this fact, most people are confused when choosing between the subjects to choose the subjects whether they like or ones that would be useful in the future.
There are positive aspects of the choice of subjects that students like. They would enjoy their study and have responsibility to themselves because they cannot blame someone else for the hard time. However, there are also negative aspects which exist. One of them is they could have hard time to get a job for their income. Because of economic growth, there are big changes in workplaces whether disappeared or gained and one of workplaces that is disappeared is the one that students study in the university. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) Those This fact is one of the positive aspects for students who choose the subject that is useful in the future. Because they follow the economic growth grows, they would have more choice for their career. Nevertheless, if students are not fit in that subject, the rest of their life include in including the university and workplace will be a hard time.
In my opinion, I would recommend to choose the subject that students like, but they have to consider the economic growth grows. For the one who does not don’t know or have the subject that they like to study, I would recommend them to choose the subject that is useful in the future unless they are not those types of person.
In conclusion, unless they do not have subject that they want or like to study, I would recommend them to choose the subject that is useful in the future.
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