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Whether or not people have to respect all animals has always been a subject of debate. Some people argue that modern people have to be a friend with animals because they animals also have the rights. However, others think that we do not need to consider animals(동물의 뭐를 고려하는지에 대한 언급이 없네요) due to people's profit and greed. In my opinion, people have to maximize that advantages(that이면 앞에 설명이 있어야하는데 없는 것 같아요) of using animals as well as minimize the disadvantages of using animals. Some people are regarding regard animals as one of the sources in the Earth because a lot of clothes and foods people are using are made out of animals. For example, by using wool from animals, people could endure an extreme cold of winter. Thus, people who argue that animals are just material say that we might not have survived without these living creatures.(예시가 너무 빈약하고, 뜻전달도 정확하지 않아요) On the other hand, others think that we have to be friends with animals because people have learned a wisdom from them(??). For instance, by observing a flying bird in the sky, people could make a plane. In other words, people were enough to make their life much better without hurting animals.(연결사는 분명히 in other words인데 전혀 맞지 않는 것 같아요) Also, people would be able to get psychological stability from animals. In reality, many doctors suggest their patients who are suffering from depression raising a pet such as a dong and a cat. In other words, people and animals are in mutual interaction with each other. In conclusion, it can not be denied that using animals has significantly affected our society. On the one hand, by using animals, the quality of our life will be improved in the way of making clothes and foods. However, people have to realize that our life will be able to be much better without hurting animals. Also, being friends with animals gives psychological stability to each other. Therefore, I strongly argue that people have to respect animals. It is the best way to improve our life.(전체적으로 포인트도 없고 의미도 없고 단어도 맞지 않습니다) |