Many young people now know more about international pop and movie stars than famous people in the history of their countries.
What are the causes? Give solutions to increase the number of people to know about famous people in history.
These days, many youngsters have more
interests in international movie and music stars rather than historical people
in their own countries. In this globalized society, we cannot avoid this
situation, so we need to come up with appropriate solutions to make young people
have an interest in history.
To begin with, the supply of the Internet (인터넷은 고유명사이므로, 극히 예외적인 경우를 제외하고는 대문자 시작해주시면 됩니다. 그 예외에 대해서는 들어가실 필요가 전혀 없고요.) internet made us be able to communicate anytime with anyone in the world. Even
celebrities can share their daily life with the public thanks to the
development of social media such as Twitter, Face book, and Instagram. These
kinds of mass communication are enough to encourage young people to be
enthusiastic with pop and movie stars, because they can feel that they are
sharing something with those famous stars. For instance, the Korean boy group
BTS won ‘top social artist’ in the 2018 billboard music awards (이거 하나가 고유명사이므로, 세 개 싹 대문자 시작입니다.) and this
unprecedented situation could occur because of their active use of social
media. It would not have taken place if there were not online technology.
However, this circumstance cannot happen among already passed away historical
famous people. Automatically young people may have more focus on people who
they can communicate with. It is important for students to learn domestic figures
who helped to develop their own country as well as international stars, so
appropriate solutions are required. (이 마지막 문장은 여기에 있을 건 아닙니다. 아예 날려버리거나, 밑으로 내려주셔야 해요.)
Most of all, the interests of pop and
movie stars can be used to promote the importance of historical knowledge by
making advertisements or films. Many teenagers definitely would pay attention
to works which their idols appear. These works can include not only
advertisements to promote how it is crucial to know about historical people,
but also films that deal with history accidents. In this regard, I want to introduce
my own experience. When I was a middle school student, I only had interests in
singers or movie stars like many other classmates students. Although I did not have much
interest in my country’s history, I became to concentrate on historical soap
operas since my favorite actor has made an appearance. It made me realize the
importance and attraction of historical people, and I was even able to could get a
certificate of Korean history.
In conclusion, the interests of
international stars that happened due to the development of the Internet internet can be
a useful tool to make young people focus on people of history.
총평: (7/7/6/7) 7.0
평소보다 어휘 사용이 조금 제한적이었지만, 다른 부분은 그럭저럭 괜찮았기 때문에 큰 문제는 없을 겁니다. 대신 인터넷의 대소문자 관련해서는 주의해주세요! 그냥 무조건 대문자로 쓴다고 보시면 됩니다.
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