Topic : In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It has been said that no one will purchase printed
newspapers and books due to the potential to read whatever they want instead of
paying in the future. I strongly believe that people will not buy printed newspapers or
books. There are several reasons to support this perspective.
One of the main reasons why people will be
reluctant to buy printed newspapers and books is that they do not have to make
the effort to visit to bookstores in person at the expense of their time and expenditures.
This might contribute to improving their self-development. For example, most of (학생들이 많이 틀리는 사항 중 하나이므로 주의해주세요!) students tend to waste their time on visiting bookstores and deciding what
books to purchase. As a result of this, their improvement in self-development
will be slow, compared to students who have the access to informative books and
newspaper on online.
Another principal reason why people will
not purchase books and newspapers is that there is much more convenience in
possessing digital books and newspapers, which might be able to broaden their
knowledge. For instance, it is highly likely that people consider bringing and
holding books or newspapers as a burden. Due to this, they do naturally lose
the awareness of how informative reading books and newspaper is. In this regard,
the ease of possessing digital books and newspapers might increase the level of
their knowledge.
In conclusion, although there might be some
people who disagree with this view, I undoubtedly believe that not purchasing
any of printed books and newspapers will be advantageous and beneficial for people
in terms of both saving time and developing knowledge a saving times and being knowledgeable perspective.
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목표:6.5
총평: (6/7/7/7) 7.0
사실 냉정히 봤을 때 '내용'이 잘 갖춰진 상황은 아닙니다. 말하고자 하는 바에 대해 딱 1단계 근거까지만 들어가고, 이게 그렇게 상세하게 설명된 사항은 아니에요. 그러나, 애초에 6.5만 필요하시기 때문에 내용 관련해서 깊게 들어갈 필요는 없습니다. 어차피 지금 어휘+문법으로 7.0은 몰라도 6.5는 충분히 받아가니까 크게 걱정 없을 겁니다. 빨간 부분이 거의 없는 점이 이를 뒷받침하죠.
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