in some countries, the rate of criminal acts being committed by teenagers is increasing. what do you think are the causes of this, and what measures could be taken solve them?
In recent years, the rate of criminal acts being committed by teenagers is increasing. In this regard, I think it would be meaningful to discuss why such a problem has been created and how this problem can be mitigated as show below. There are several some causes of this situation. The main reason is that punishment towards of teenager’s criminal is too weak.
Weakness of punishment about teenagers criminals leads to a loss in the awareness of crime to makes lose awareness of crime to teenagers. For example, if they are not punished although they commit a serious crime. They they will not reflect on oneself related their crime. In addition, if they are not aware of the do not awareness seriousness of crime. They commit they would commit a more serious crime when then teenager When they become an adult.
Nevertheless, I thinks that the government should prevent increase of teenagers crime. Firstly, In order to prevent this increase in juvenile crime, the government should strengthen punishment of teenager’s crime. For instance, we have to make teenagers aware of committing a serious crime by bringing in a heavy punishment. Also, teenagers need a mental counseling for awareness related criminal seriousness. For example, we should give an opportunity of mental counseling to teenagers who commit crime will give opportunity to teenagers who commit crime. So that they can receive metal counseling. This would make things makes them be aware about the seriousness of crime. Also it can prevent to commit more serious crime when they become adult.
In conclusion, although crime of teenagers has been increased we can resolve the problem using various used various ways.
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