1. 목표점수: 6.5
2. 시험예정: 2020. 11. 8. (점수기한: 2020. 11. 30.)
3. 소요시간: 50분, 332자
4. Band 9 모범답안으로 표현을 습득하여 적용하고 있는데 시간이 부족한 편입니다.
-Topic
People’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful nowadays and there are many reasons
behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that
high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your
opinion, what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or
experience.
-Answer
There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether people's stress are caused by the technological inhancement or competitions and living costs. There is no doubt that the values of modern life have become diverse has been diversed as globalism phenomenon spreads out around the world, for which we are facing lots of stress in our modern-day. However, I personally acknowledge that competitions are the most crucial part of this in many ways. Starting in the next paragraphs, reasons for this phenomenon will be analysed and relevant solutions will be providd as well.
First and foremost, the primary reason we have to take into consideration is that stress has always existed over the hundred decades ago. That means it is not related to our environment like technologies, but our inner mind. A stress rate in the past was the best eample, at that time, its rate also high compared to modern life because of severe social problems. It is an obviously true that there was no state-of-the-art technologies, hence the relationship between stress and technical development are apparently neglected. In the second place, stress has a relatively charaterstic in terms of individuals' daily lives. For instance, if somebody was were perfectly controlling one's life according to how he or she wanted it to go, not by others, there would be no stress in life how they want to do, not by others, it might be no stress in his life. Therefore, aforementioned evidences are certainly clear so we need to adeptly recognize them.
Then, what can we have to solve this problem? (지금은 연설문의 대본을 쓰는 과정이 아니기 때문에, 의문형은 따로 쓰지 않는다고 보시면 됩니다.) Personally, I strongly believe that having a positive mindset is a key point. There are generally a lot of evidences that the postivie mindset provides us with a good shpae of our body and nice emotions. In oder words, it is wise that we change our mindset just concentrating on oneself for being healthier. Last but not least, we sincerely have to enjoy each life. We have to try to get a relevant job what jobseekers want to be and follow one's career for sastisfaction.
In conclusion, despite the fact that it is impossible to change our stress life, I i strongly recommend having a positive mindset as well as enjoying life passionately can be an effective solution, which I i believe soundly based on the above reasoning I i have presented.
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Cause
1. stress has always existed over the hundred decades ago. high ratio of suicide, no technical ? , pressure by ?? n
2. individuals' value has diversed, stress is relatively value of our daily life. we don't want to do it.
Solution
1. have a positive mindset,
2. enjoy one's life sincerely, try to get a job that wants to be now and follow your life
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총평: (8/7/6/7) 7.0
시간 때문에 7.0은 나오지 않을 거지만, 여하튼 6.5는 충분히 보장되는 글입니다. 대신 시간은 꼭 줄여주세요! 이제 진짜로 시험까지 얼마 남지 않았습니다. 모범답안 보시면서 막 엄청 신중하고 어렵게 쓰지 않으셔도 돼요. 어차피 시험장에서는 모범답안을 볼 기회도 없으며, 6.5는 그렇게 높은 점수가 아니기 때문에 그냥 깔끔하게만 쓰시면 충분히 받습니다. 철자 오류에 대해서도 주의해주세요!
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