Q. Is it better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents? Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, many college students want to live in other cities., apart from their house for going to the good university. Some believe that living without family is extremely dangerous, while others some individuals say that it makes students children more independent. That is true that it is essential to live alone in society. I partly agree with those who think that independence from parents physically could have is could be positive effects to students, but there are some problems in the opposite case.
As mentioned, living apart from family improves student's independence. Most collegians have never lived away from home until they entered college. If they are living apart from their parents for the first time, they can learn what to watch out for and how to live alone. Research has have shown that most people who get a job first time are dependent because they have no experience of living to live and do alone. Therefore, independence is necessary for university student and this is a preparation process for becoming a member of society.
On the other hand, there is a problem the issue (뭔지를 정확하게 밝혀주세요!). They can be under danger dangerous if they live alone without guardians like parents. Harvard research center claimed that many students can be exposed to contact with drugs. many Many college freshman have a lot of curiousity and they cannot control themselves well. In addition, many women can be exposed to crime such as murder and rape if they live alone. Therefore, it can be a problem when living without without living family.
In conclusion, living far away from home is not a bad decision if you consider the children's independence and experience. I partly agree that there are more advantages to live without family for collegian's future.
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6.0이긴 한데, 되게 아슬아슬한 상황입니다. 아마 5.5주는 채점관도 많았을 거에요.
먼저, 지금 문법이 그렇게 깔끔하지 않습니다. 물론 7점 필요하신 건 아니니까 인생을 문법에 갈아넣을 필요까지는 없지만, 그래도 매일매일 꾸준히, 조금씩이라도 문법 공부를 하면서 기본기를 확실히 다져주셔야 합니다. 귀찮다고 문법 공부 없이 글만 쓰지 않도록 해주세요!
또한, 지금처럼 논제에서 do you agree or disagree? 라고 했을 때에는 웬만하면 부분동의 같은 건 하지 말고 그냥 하나만 쓰시는 걸 추천드립니다. 부분동의를 깔끔하게 하기는 매우 어려우며, 심지어 어떤 논제들은 부분동의가 불가해요. 그런데 학생들이 뭐가 가능하고 뭐가 그렇지 않은지를 구분하는 건 쉽지 않습니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)