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It is common belief that the best way to succeed is having a own single skill for life. Someone might agree, however, I support to the idea that to develop various skills can bring a better future is to bring in the better future life.
Of course we can not discount fact that to concentrate only one skill to make people as professional in their field. To explain, the people who find what they want to be from when they are younger; They would have many time to build their skills and get a head a start than others who do not. For example, if they build their careers only one skill in their sector they can get higher salary due to they are the people who are recognized in their sphere (이 문단은 여러 개의 스킬을 강조하는 또다른 내용으로 채워주시면 됩니다. 자세한 건 밑에서 링크를 넣어드릴게요.)
However, the fact still remains that to focus on only one skill can is to make some risks in their future life. To be specific, some people might get tired of their job easily then they will try to find which job is more appropriate to them will look for again that which job is more appropriate to them. Therefore, most young people try to work at various work places because they want to work at a job which suits is suit for their aptitude. In addition, people can have a lot of opportunities if they are versatile.
In conclusion, it is true a certain extent that developing only one skill is to make them as professional, however I still believe that having to have several skill could lead to get more benefits to people.
목표는 5.5... 입니다. 지난번에 문법 관련해서 지적을 많이 받아서.. 피드백 받은걸로 한번 공책작성하고 또 옮겨 적으면서 잘못된것 있는지 확인하고 적느라 시간은 못쟀네요ㅜㅜ 문법 공부는 피드백 받은걸로 고치고 있는데 적용하는게 너무 힘드네요ㅜㅜ 혹시 글 작성에서 단순한 문법이라도 5.5 받는게 힘들까요? 최소 일단 이점수라도 받으면 되는데..
아니요! 문법 공부는 제가 피드백해드린 걸로 하시면 안 됩니다. 제가 고쳐드린 게 유일한 답이 아니며, 저는 저만의 스타일이 있기 때문이죠. 고로 제가 고쳐드린 건 그냥 참고 정도만 하시면 돼요. 문법 공부는 저희 문법 기본서이든, 다른 회사 기본서이든 하나를 사서 그거만 죽어라 파시면 됩니다.
그리고 단순한 문법을 쓰셔야 5.5를 받습니다. 어차피 복잡한 거 써봤자 틀려서 더 감점만 될 바에, 최대한 간결하게 써서 맞추는 게 중요해요. 이는 5.5는 물론, 7.0 이하의 점수에서 다 마찬가지입니다. 무조건 덜 틀리는 게 좋습니다 :)
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