■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM
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Candidate Name:텍스트 Candidate Number:텍스트
Centre Number:텍스트1 Date:텍스트1
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Some people say that the extensive use of computers
in schools will replace the role of teachers.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Your Answer ▼
I disagree with the opinion that the extensive use of computers in schools will replace the role of teachers. This is because Because teachers in school do many thins that can't computers cannot (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다. 뒤에도 마찬가지이고요.) do for students. For example, in a situation of when a student is hurt, or students fight, they must need an adult to resolve that. I think computers can't do it. Furthermore, teachers take care of students during the school time. So (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 않습니다.) they know each students' identity and can give them advices. In my experience, I had serious problems with my friends, so I was alone. At that time I couldn't tell my parents because I didn't want to make them worry. But my teacher catched that situation and she gave me an advice and ability to solve the problem. It was really helpful to me. Thanks to her, I cheered up and was able to could solve problems with my friends. Like this case, there are lots of things that computers can't do instead of teachers. So I believe that although the extensive use of computers in schools, it will not replace the role of teachers.
총평: (5/4/5/6) 5.0
문제되는 건 크게 두 가지가 있습니다.
먼저, 문단을 나눠주셔야 합니다. 지금처럼 모든 글을 죄다 하나의 문단에 때려박지 마시고, 서론, 두 개의 본론, 그리고 결론을 잘 갖춰주셔야 해요. 또한 현재 분량이 너무 부족한 상황입니다. 눈대중으로만 봐도 180자 정도밖에 안 되어보이는데, 이 경우 시험장에서 추가적인 감점이 있습니다. 즉, 제가 드린 점수보다 더 떨어진다고 보셔야 해요.
다른 부분에도 문제가 없는 건 아니지만, 일단 가장 다급한 이 두 개를 먼저 해결해주세요!
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Total Score: /9 Examiner:
TR
(Task Response) CC
(Coherence and Cohesion) LR
(Lexical Resource) GRA
(Grammatical Range and Accuracy)
Score /9 /9 /9 /9
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