▶ Your Answer :
The bar graphs given depict the differences in the destinations of
graduates and postgraduates except the ones who got a full-time work in the UK in
the year of 2008.
In general, we can easily observe that the number of graduates is
overwhelming the postgraduates. Thus, we should focus on the proportion of each
party. In that manner, I can say that postgraduates are tend to choose part-time
work than graduates while graduates are very much fond of further study.
To be specific, in both groups, part-time work and further study are
the top two destinations while voluntary work and unemployment are holding
small number with 345 and 1,625 respectively in postgraduates, and 3,500 and
16,235 respectively in graduates. In terms of the difference of proportion made
my part-time work and further study, the gap is much wider in graduates. While
the proportion of further study and part-time work is only 27:25 in
postgraduates, it is largely widened in graduates by 29:17. <(proportion 외에exact numbers를 주시면 좋을 것 같습니다)
In conclusion, we can say that both groups are not interested in voluntary
work, and more graduates are taking further study courses than postgraduates due to
the reason that there are proportionally more postgraduates are choosing part-time work compared to
graduates.
Score: 7.5 Comment: 잘 서술해주셨습니다. 내용 정리를 조금 더 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고 하셨습니다.
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