The given chart shows how often Americans eat at fast food restaurants from 2003 to 2013.
(이 위치에 결론 대신 Overview를 넣어주시면 됩니다.)
The most significant feature is that more than 30 percent of Americans enjoyed eating out once a week in 2003 and 2006. While, this While the number slightly fell for those when eating once or twice a month in the same year, it increased more than 10 percent (지금은 수학시간이 아니기 때문에 뺄셈을 하실 필요가 없지만, 굳이 뺄셈을 해야겠다면 퍼센트포인트를 붙여주셔야 합니다. 이에 대해서는 총평에서 링크를 드릴게요.) in the following year 2013. But (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.) the fact had not changed that these two frequency, which is once a week and once or twice a month, granted the highest figures of all.
On the other hand, only 15 to 25 percent of people went out for food several times a week. Although the percentage was slightly higher in 2006, they remained relatively stable during the period. The second-lowest group is the percentage of a few times a year visits visited restaurants, which fluctuated over 10 to 15 percent. Finally, the rate of every day and never eating at restaurants remained the lowest figure which was 0 to 5 percent over the period.
To sum up, the graph illustrates that most people eat once a week and once or twice a month at restaurants. While, the proportion was extremely low at every day and never, each were less than 5 percent. (Task 1은 결론을 내기 위해 존재하지 않습니다. 이를 대신해서 서론 밑에 Overview라는 것을 넣어주시면 되는데, 성격 자체는 결론과 비슷하다고 보시면 돼요.)
총평: (6/6/7/7) 6.5
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+퍼센트포인트의 경우는 밑의 링크를 참고해주시면 됟겠습니다.
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