The chart gives the information about the comparison that how many people of the number of people that searched two new types of music websites within 15 days. Overall, Pop Parade site constantly kept having a higher more visits than Music Choice site, except for the days from the 12th to the middle of the 13th. In Music Choice site, there was a significant variation after the 11th, but during rest of the period, the number of visitors remained as low figures with below the number of 60,000.
Firstly, from the day 1st to 9th, the graph shows a somewhat different trend among two websites. Pop parade represented a downward trend, while Music Choice showed some fluctuations in visits during the same period. From this point to 11th day, however However, the number of Pop Parade’s visitors rocketed sharply to around 150,000, while different from Music Choice still had only about 30,000 users.
Interestingly, there were was a noticeable statistical change between the 11th and the 13th, as Music Choice users dramatically rose by the number of 120,000 and exceeded that of reversed Pop Parade’, and kept a higher grade for more than a day. Nevertheless, only for a day, starting from the 13th, almost over 80,000 users visited Pop Parade site and ultimately peaked at the highest figure on the 15th day at 170,000, while visitors of Music Choice fell down again to approximately 70,000 people.
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