The chart indicates the frequency of USA citizens' meals in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
What stands out from the chart is that a similar trend was has seen in
2003 and 2006. Also, it is noticeable that the highest share of the frequency
of eating at fast food restaurants in 2013 was different from the other years in
question.
Looking at the trend of the chart in 2003 and 2006, a similar trend
was seen, pointing the largest share of people ate fast food once a week at
around 30% and 33%, respectively. And (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못하긴 하지만, 사실 6.0 넘기는데에는 아무런 지장 없습니다.), the smallest share of people had fast
food every day in both years. Focusing on the trend in 2013, unlike the past
years in question, the chart showed that people in the USA had fast food less
often than the past, indicating the largest percentage of people ate fast food
once or twice a month. In 2013, People people who went who go to fast food restaurants once or
twice a month accounted for about 33%, whereas 25% of people were comprised in
2006 at the same frequency.
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