A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she asked for your advice.
explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
describe some possible disadvantages
say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.
Hello, I’m Hi, (친구 이름) Jenny (공적인 글과 달리 사적인 글에서는 그냥 바로 용건으로 들어가시면 됩니다. 친구들한테 자기소개는 따로 하지 않죠.). I am writing to you to
give you advice about a camping travel you asked for. I hope this letter would
help you to enjoy your first camping experience.
In my opinion, I think going camping for holiday is
ideal for you and your family because a camping trip can enable children to learn
a new world such as catching fish, observing wild lives, and enjoying nature which
hardly can be experienced in cities. I do believe that your kids would love to do
them just like other children.
The one thing that I am concerned about going camping is a bear attack. Even though it rarely happens, there are some people who are injured due to the attack of bears. In order to avoid this, please make sure that check whether the protecting system is working properly first and stay within the safety zone.
Since I and my kids and I miss the time we have
been traveling together, if circumstances allow, I would like to join the camping
travel. I believe it will give all of us a fantastically enjoyable moment. Let me
know your idea.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Best regards,
Jenny.
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