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Some people argue that art and music classes are the least important subjects in school. But (얘는 however 등으로 바꿔주시면 되며, 밑의 and 등도 대체재를 잘 찾아주시면 됩니다.) I firmly believe that art and music classes are one of the most essential subjects of all. Firstly, it (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상이 대명사로 쓰여서는 안 됩니다. 밑에도 마찬가지이고요.) helps students to be more creative. It is well-known that students with various source of art and music experience had a tendency to get more creative when a certain task is given. (이 문장의 경우 바로 앞의 문장이랑 사실상 같은 말입니다. 즉, 분량채우기에요.) They can see things in a different point of view, since art and music are the kind of subject that does not have a ‘model answer’. Secondly, it can be the start of a new path for student who did not had the chance to experience art and music before. Its not easy to find out their talent if students cannot get the chance to experience it. Personally personally, I had a friend who I met in middle school. And because of her domestic situation, she did not get to have a chance to play guitar, even though she was highly interested in it. She had her first guitar experience at 14, in the music class. And now she’s (줄임말은 풀어써주세요!) majoring it. She always says she was very lucky to discover her talent at a young age. All this could have been impossible or delayed if we did not have had a music class. In conclusion, I strongly believe that art and music classes are something that is vital for students. This is not Not only because it is enjoyable, but also because it can bring out so many benefits for students. Therefore, I disagree on the statement that art and music classes should not be mandatory.
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