감사합니다.
The
bar chart illustrates an unmentioned country’s export income from diverse products in 2015 and
in 2016, and units are measured in billion dollars, while the table illustrates (문법은 이게 맞는데, 애초에 앞에 있는 단어이므로 대체해주시는 게 베스트입니다.) the proportion change in each group of exported products in 2016 in comparison
to 2015. Overall, there is a profound difference between the highest and
the lowest income (어떤 항목인지 정도는 언급해주셔야 합니다. Overview가 포괄적이어야 하는 것은 맞지만, 그래도 이정도의 구체성은 필요해요.). In addition, export-income from all given
products increased in 2016 excepting gems and jewellery.
Turning first to the detail, petroleum products achieved the highest export income in both given years, increasing 3% in 2016. Secondly, the increase in the percentage of textiles export is the most (15.24%) but its value is the lowest, recording 25 billion dollars and 31 billion dollars respectively.
On the other hand, Agricultural agricultural products
has the lowest increase percentage (only 0.81%) excepting gem and jewellery’s
decrease percentage by 5.18%. Meanwhile, value of engineering goods was about
59 billion dollars in 2015, increasing (너무 자주 쓰이고 있습니다. 무조건 대체가 필요한 상황이에요.) by 8.5% in 2016.
총평: (7/7/6/7) 7.0
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