Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups, while other believe that it is better for them to study alone.
In modern society, it has been one of the heated discussions as to whether students should study in a group or alone. Some people think that studying in a group is more effective while others say it is better to do so study alone. I think studying together has more benefits as students can learn various views from others. In this essay, the reasons of each opinion will be elaborated.
On the one hand, studying alone can make students focus more intensively. In Korea, there are many study rooms where students can study (여기도 충분히 동의어 활용이 가능합니다.) in private rooms or spaces so that they can concentrate to their own studying (여기도 이전 글에서 대체가 필요하다고 체크해드린 부분이죠.) and not to be disturbed by others. As a result, many people were satisfied in this way to improve their academic skills. This is because individuals can control their own pace and routines and do not have to care of other students. Everyone has their own ways to accumulate knowledge. For these reasons, studying alone has some advantages.
On the other hand, doing homework with others has benefits that can (여기의 경우 제가 이전 글에서 pupil 뒤에 can을 옮기면서 미처 지워드리지 못했네요ㅠㅠ) pupils can interact with each other and get different opinions from the same matters as well as improve communication skills. Most countries encourage students to study together because students can have broadened perspectives via discussions with other students. Communication skill is one of the important parts of society so children can get these substantial skills naturally. In addition, through interacting each others, learners can learn how to accept and discuss others’ opinions. Since people can get not only the knowledge but also skills to communicate, studying in a group is more effective.
To sum up, both of the aforementioned opinions have several advantages respectively. However, I think that studying together is a more effective way in learning which can increase communication skills and gives a change to interact with each others.
총평: 이번 글도 다시 쓰실 필요까지는 없었지만, 여하튼 이전 글의 문제점이 깔끔하게 해결되었다고 보기에는 무리가 있습니다. 특히 study가 한 문장에 두 번 쓰이는 것은 웬만하면 피해주셔야 해요. 제가 서론에 해드린 것과 같이 do so로도 대체가 가능하고, 그 외에 여러 방법들이 존재하니까 잘 활용해주세요~
+같은 논제에 대해서 다시 작성하실 거면, 기존 글에서 일부만 바꾸고 나머지를 필사하는 것이 아닌, 아예 쌩으로 다시 쓰는 게 훨~~~씬 도움됩니다. 물론 이 경우에 저는 해야 할 일이 늘어나겠지만, 그럼에도 불구하고 Dd님의 실력에 있어서는 후자가 훨씬 좋습니다.
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