The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling.
The flow chart below depicts how the waste paper is recycled.
Overall, there are generally four steps of recycling waste paper. Gathering paper from public, sorting and delivering it to paper mill, cleaning, and lastly, manufacturing it to usable paper. (다이어그램 유형의 Overview를 다룰 경우, 앞 문장의 단계 수와 더불어서, 이 문장에서는 시작과 끝 단계를 Starting from ~~ to~~ 로 언급해주시면 됩니다.)
First of all, this whole process starts from collecting waste paper from public paper banks and as well as from businesses. Then, paper is graded by its quality, and or paper that is unsuitable to use is removed. This graded paper is delivered to a paper mill.
Next, paper in the paper mill is cleaned by pulping and removing of other materials, and ink and glues on it is also removed also should be removed. Last but not least, the final step is manufacture this cleaned paper is manufactured in a machine, so it can be used again.
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