In recent years, feeding personal information on online websites has become a common situation today. Personally, I believe this phenomenon gives a lot of benefits to the public.
To start with, people can enjoy a convenient life by putting their information online once. In fact, nowadays, people do not need to carry a wallet or go to a city hall to apply for a certain certificate such as a family relation certificate or a passport. When people put their credit card information in their mobile banking application, People can purchase something in a market by a smart payment system like Samsung Pay and it is only required on their mobile phone. When people put their credit card information in their mobile banking application, the wallet is no longer needed. In addition, if people fill in their information on a government website, they also can apply for passports or other certificate documents online. As a result, all these works are done with online services.
The other positive effect of online is that people can reduce wasting time. To elaborate, online shopping is now increasingly popular with the public so plenty of markets and companies sell their products online. People can purchase anything on the Internet by using a smart payment system at any time, anywhere. If people put their house address and telephone numbers, they also can get a delivery of the products whatever they bought. Therefore, even if a market is located far away from people’s homes, they do not need to waste their time to go to a store.
In conclusion, I believe that people can provide a lot of ease and positive effects from online by only putting their information.
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