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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Opinions are divided whether these advances in electronic devices that altered children’s leisure time have a positive or a negative impact on their these youngsters. In my opinion, although there are certain advantages associated with this trend, their downside outweighs the upside in this situation.

On the one hand, there are few merits in letting children be more attached to technology than going outdoors. First and foremost, the younger generation will have more opportunities to gain more fundamental knowledge if they are interested in certain areas. For instance, by watching television shows based on their interest such as geographical issues, these kids will learn much valuable information based on regarding that category. As a consequence, without any pressure and teaching, children would learn and understand a large variety of contents.

However, there are some obvious drawbacks to this trend(사실 문단이 새로 시작될 때 지칭어를 써주시기 보다는 온전히 무엇을 지칭하는 것인지 풀어서 써주시는 것이 가장 좋습니다.). One of the most negative side effects is that if these adolescents are keen to play computer games or watch television rather than be a part of outdoor activities, they will be more prone in getting obese. Specifically, these children will become increasingly sedentary and passive if they spend more time indoors. As a consequence, these kids might be threatened with harmful diseases. Moreover, with fewer outdoor activities, youngsters will lack many crucial values that could only be picked up by mingling with their age groups peers. In other words, children will not know how socially interact with people and lack teamwork skills.

All in all, despite the benefits as of new technologies, have been for that bring children to spend their leisure time by using them  children’s leisure time, I contend that this trend is more likely to cause more problems in the long run. Therefore, the parents and school must work together to curb the excesses of the work(?) by balancing the indoor and outdoor activities of these youngsters during their leisure time.

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먼저 전체적 글을 써주실 때, new technologies로 인해 아이들이 outdoor activities를 줄이고 indoor 하게 leisure time을 소비한다는 것을 전제하고 계신데, 이 부분은 사실 문제에서 나온 건 아니기 때문에 이 부분에 대한 설명이 서론에서 먼저 설득력있게 나와줘야 할 듯 합니다. 그렇지 않으면 100% 문제에 정확히 답변하는 느낌보다는, 주어진 템플릿에 끼워맞춘 느낌이 들 수 있어요. 문제를 정확히 파악해주시고 어느 가정을 추가해주실지, 어떤 전제를 깔고 가 주실 건지 생각하신 것이 있다면 글의 서두에서 먼저 그 부분을 보여주셔야 합니다.

수고하셨습니다 :)