Q. People should only concentrate on a single skill for life because it is the best way to succeed. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
A.
It is a common belief that people think that specializing in a single skill is the best way to succeed in their life. However, I firmly believe that people should concentrate on more than one skill for their future.
Firstly, learning various skills can expand people's knowledge as they are understanding new things which they haven't (줄임말은 풀어써주시는 게 좋습니다. 즉 여기의 경우 have not으로 가는 거죠.) got to know before. Being aware of new different types of skills will be important for their future and one of them will be a benefit to them as a job because they have the ability to acknowledge a skill easily. For instance, when people apply for a job, they can write down more activities on their curriculum vitae (줄여서 CV로 쓸 때에는 대문자 시작이지만, 풀어쓸 때에는 소문자 시작입니다.) Curriculum Vitae as they have known various skills. So (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.) they will have more opportunities compared to the others who are only specialized in one skill.
On top of that, people only live once and they need to try everything once in their life to make magnificent experiences. The most important thing in their life is to broaden their viewpoint and the person who experienced various things is more mature than the people who just get to know only one particular thing. By way of example, people say traveling all over the world can widen their perspective and it is important to know the cultures from different countries. Like we need to know various cultures and lifestyles, it is also likely important to know different types of skills.
To sum up, Being being aware and understanding a lot of skills is so much better than specializing in only a single skill in their future. For these reasons, concentrating on a single skill is not a good idea if people really want to succeed in their future.
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