Advertisements can have many unintended effects that are negative on children. What are the effects of advertisements on the development of children?
Suggest possible solutions to alleviate the problem.
Many people have stated that advertisements have negative influences on children’s eating habits, so many young children have become obese in modern society. To solve this problem, the government should actively implement campaigns to encourage having healthy dietary habits among children.
The issue of childhood obesity has become more widespread since advertisements stimulate children to eat fast food a lot. This is because fast food in commercials looks delicious and even healthy. To be specific, advertisements never show that food contains how much fat, sugar and sodium food contains, and children only see images what advertisements show them. Thus, they eat fast food without considering nutrients and even make unhealthy eating habits. For this reason, children who eat fast food too often become easily obese.
To alleviate this problem among children, the government should lead campaigns which aim to decrease childhood obesity. Most young children lack information about nutrients, so they do not know what food they have to eat enough or not. Thus, the government should encourage children (동의어는 적절히 있으니까 가끔가다 잘 대체해주세요! 매번 바꾸실 것까지는 없습니다.) to learn the importance of having healthy diets through campaigns. For example, they can support schools to teach students that eating fast food too often will cause childhood obesity and have long-term disadvantages in their health. As a result, children can reduce eating to eat fast food by themselves and will try to have a balanced diet in life.
In conclusion, it is apparent that commercials tempt children to eat fast food a lot. However, they are able to decrease to eat this food and have healthy eating habits by learning the importance of healthy diets. Thus, the governments should proactively implement campaigns for children to raise their awareness.
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잘 써주셨는데, 글이 마치 '논제에서부터 fast food로만 한정지은 것처럼' 적혀있는 점은 아쉽습니다. 논제는 광고 전반을 다루고 있지, 논제에서 직접적으로 fast food로 결정지은 건 아니므로, fast food가 일부임을 보여주세요!
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