■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading

▶ Your Answer : The two pie charts elucidates the percentage of those who died of contagious diseases in Canada in the year 1900 and 1930. As it is shown, there are some considerable differences between the two charts.

The largest proportion of deaths' causes was diphtheria in 1900, while other non-pandemic diseases constituted the greatest percentage of the all the diseases in 1930. There was a significant fall in the level of typhoid and diphtheria to 18% and 24% respectively in 1930, and the number of those who died of two diseases come out to be 5760 and 7880 people each. <(exact number of deaths를 Canada의 전체 population을 모르기 때문에 알 수 없습니다. 차트에 나오는 내용은 per 1000 people 이기 때문에 per 1000 people중에 infectious disease으로 죽은 사람의 (86명) 18%/24% 가 typhoid 또는 diphtheria로 죽은 것입니다.) 

 The proportions of those who died from measles were exactly same in both the years, and the levels of whooping cough and scarlet fever were similar. In addition there was a tremendous decrease in the number of people who passed away due to infectious diseases to the extent of over a half from 86 K to 32 K.

At the end, in 1930, more inhabitants who breathed their last from non-spreading diseases were a part of the total above all.<(unclear)

Score: 5.5

Comment: Numerical data support를 조금 더 전달을 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 예를 들어 typhoid and diphtheria가 significantly fell 했다고 해주셨는데 1930년도 percentage만으로 significantly fell 했다고 전달이 되지는 않습니다. 또한 캐나다의 전체 population을 모르기 때문에 정확한 deaths를 알지 못합니다. 그저 각 1000중에 86명이 infectious disease으로 죽었다는 걸 알기 때문에 rate 만 알 수 있습니다. 그렇기 때문에 86K/32k/5760/7880 deaths는 잘못된 정보입니다. 수고 하셨습니다.