■ Direction· Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
· Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Your Answer ▼ As parents bring up their children, they encounter the time when their children do bad behavior and they think whether punishment is necessary or not. I agree that punishment has a positive function for children.
Those who disagree with punishment tent tend to believe that human is kind and honest, then that children can learn what is right or wrong by themselves as growing up. They say that punishment is negative stimulus and harmful to children. However, I think that children are "tabula rasa", and they need to learn what behavior is good or bad from others, especially from adults. One's moral cognition and attitude have been are made since he of or she was is very young. Children's experiences and lessons influence their whole lives. Punishment is one of the way to help children learn how to behave right.
There are various ways of punishment. I think punishment is necessary, but physical punishment need to be prohibited. Advocates of physical punishment insist that it shows an instant educational effect and changes children's behavior. However, if children get physical punishment, they can learn violence. In the psychological research, the kids who watched violence on TV tended to show violent behavior. In addition, children have a right for their safety. Excessive or continous physical punishment can make children feel bad, even suffer from physical and mental problems.
In conclusion, punishment is a helpful way to learn children what is good or bad, but it is based on words, not violent way.
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채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
Score (9점 만점) | 5 | 5 | 5 | 5 | 5 |
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전반적으로 제시문에 대해 논리적으로 답변해주셨으나 두번째 부분인 어떤 처벌이 적절한가에 대한 답변이 조금 미흡해 보입니다. 신체적 처벌이 아이들에게 주는 부정적인 영향 이후에 어떤 처벌이 적절한지에 대해 좀 더 구체적으로 언급해주신다면 더 좋은 글이 될 수 있을 것이라고 생각됩니다. 수고하셨습니다.