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This bar graph illustrates the amount of UK telephone calls with an interval of one 1 year, <(interval of one year 보다는 언제 부터 언제 까직인지를 전달을 해주시면 더 좋습니다) categorizing into three 3 types (Local – fixed line, National and international– fixed line, all types of mobile calls).
As clearly seen from the chart, the fixed line local calls are the most preferred way of communication in Great Britain throughout the research period. While the amount of locally made calls shows a downward trend after it reaches its highest pick in 1999, the other two types of telephone calls increase constantly since 1995. In particular, Especially the national and international calls, which were nearly half of the locally made calls, almost caught up with the local ones by exceeding 60 billion calls.<(when?)
It’s quite notable that the minutes of mobile calls kept its keep it's growth from the beginning of the research period chart until the end of it. When it comes to the increased amount, the mobile calls' minutes are almost doubled to compare with it in 1995. <(1995년도 와 2002년도 data를 비교를 하시는 것이라면 double 보다 더 많이 increase 했습니다)
Overall, the local calls seem fluctuated by showing a steady increasing tendency from 1995 to 1999 while and started to decrease from 1999 to 2002. On the other hand, both of the national & international calls and the mobile calls rose constantly and the latter’s upward trend was sharp in particular. <(repetitive. 또한 fluctuate 라는 표현은 increase 했다 decrease했다를 불규칙적으로 한다는 뜻입니다. 그렇다고 하기에는 local fixed line은 계속 올라가다가 중간에 decrease를 시작하면서 계속 decrease만 했습니다.)
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