Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion
As we live in an age of rapid technological advance, the development in the field of artificial intelligence expedites and these days, it is used for various purposes in many different kinds of fields. Due to this situation, some people think the growth of the artificial intelligence field will cost (cost의 경우 주로 중립 혹은 부정적인 문맥에서 쓰여서 여기의 경우 그렇게 적절하다고 보기에는 무리가 있습니다.) a positive impact on our lives in the foreseeable future whereas the others are afraid about a world which computers are more intelligent than humans (논제에서 그대로 쓰인 표현이라, 가급적이면 바꿔주시는 게 좋습니다. 지호님 실력이면 충분히 대체가 가능할 거에요.). Both of these views opinions make sense but I (파란색 표시된 사항에 관해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) believe that the first point of view is more reasonable.
Grafting artificial intelligence into diverse fields such as medical or business fields, it gives us so many advantages to our society. It helps people to handle their work much faster and suggests numerous ways to solve the problem by the huge input information. Furthermore, it replaces the number of workers who work in 3D conditions-dirty, difficult, and dangerous conditions- and completes the work more rapidly and accurately than a human being does.
On the other hand, however, (둘 중 하나만 써주시면 됩니다.) there are some people who are worried about the society in which computers are going to be smarter than humans. As artificial intelligence develops more and more, it replaces our workplaces, therefore, the rate of unemployment increases. Moreover, to improve the ability of artificial intelligence which is mainly used for simple work yet, it would cost an enormous amount of money for implementation.
Despite a few disadvantages that can possibly occur, AI will complete their work with great precision and be a lot of help to our society if it develops more in the future. I can totally understand that there are some people who are afraid of its side effects which can happen to appear and I suppose that’s (줄임말은 풀어써주시면 됩니다.) why we need to prepare the device can minimize its side effect such as ‘three laws as robotics.’ Thus, I believe it will bring us a positive impact on our lives and it is worth to do conduct further investigation.
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총평: (6/7/7/6) 6.5
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