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It is true many students are getting interested in creating their own business and the growing number of colleges are encouraging them to do. While some people are concerned that it would intefere with a student's study, I think that its benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
Admittably, running a business during attending a college has some disadvantages. It could make (개인적으로는 disturb from을 추천드립니다.) students hard to focus on their studies. Most students already have a hectic schedule. They usually take around 7 lectures a week and need to do a lot of assignments such as writing an essay and conducting an experiment. However, running Running a business is a highly time-consuming activity. Thus, it could be a burden on them and students could not be able to focus on their study.
In spite of the negative points mentioned above, I still believe that creating a business during college days provides more advantages. First of all, it allows students to apply their knowledge learned at colleges to real life. It would help students to understand what they learned at college more deeply. Furthermore, it could even motivate students to study harder. If a business is related to students' major, they would study their major more so that they can generate more income. In my view, running a business is beneficial for students in terms of a more active and broad learning experience.
In conclusion, I think students will gain more than they lose from starting a business since they are in colleges. (이렇게 쓰시면 대학에 있기 '때문에' 쪽으로 해석돼서, 별로 추천드리지는 않습니다. 이런 게 CC의 고려 요소이고요.)
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