<Topic> Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words. |
In today's capitalistic society, while some people think that the government should make a the most effort to economic progress for their country, others think that there are other important types of progresses that are evenly crucial for the country. Personally However, I agree with the statement that economic progress is the most government's considerable goal.
On the other one hand, there is an argument that there are more essential values than economic development in today's society. Some argue that medical care services are as important as money and economic development. These days, many people suffer from illnesses and lack of basic necessities. The government help is essential to help a person who is suffering from a poverty. Up to this day, many people died from expensive cost of treatment. For example, in the United States, many citizens are afraid of going to the hospital because it costs their arms and legs. Since the medical insurance is not guaranteed by the government, many people choose to death rather than paying for the costly treatment.
Nevertheless, there are more advantages when companies grow grew, and become larger and larger, because the firms would need to the firms needed to hire more people which leads to job creations. Due to rise of employments, the unemployment rates will decreased and individual's income will increase. For example, the Korea governments prioritized the economic progress as their main goal in 2000, and Korea became wealthy since then. The government provided all their support to large companies like Samsung and LG, and spent a lot of money to educate students to work for global companies. After these efforts, Korea significantly developed from developing country to developed country just for in several decades.
To sum up, although it is clear that medical affairs are a more important goal than the economic process, I think governments should prioritize thier goal for a economic development. This is because there are more benefits to every citizen when country begins to developed. |
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