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<Topic> Some people believe that unpaid community service
should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working
for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger
children). To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. |
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It has been claimed that students should contribute to the
vulnerable group in society and the service should be one of the secondary
school curriculums. However, some other people object that it is not an
adolescents’ obligation to help those people. (만약에 시간이 부족하셨다면 현재 to what extent do you~유형에서는 이 문장을 빼셔도 괜찮습니다. 대신 이에 따라 뒷 문장이 살짝 수정되어야겠죠.) As I completely agree with the
former statement, the supportive ideas will be discussed in this essay.
First
and foremost, I strongly believe that students these days only (이게 들어가야 더 정확할 것 같네요.) learn how to compete with
their friends due to the way of assessment. Since the assessment system intends
to evaluate those youngsters in a comparative way, students are likely to
compete rather than cooperate with their peers
What
is more, when I was passing through the pandemic which was one of the most
tragic crises in human history, I realized that the communities in the world
consist of a variety of people and they fought well against the difficulties
what we had. Nonetheless, people in paucity who belong to the non-profit
community suffered from other people’s ignorance
In condensation, although there are some arguments against non-profit society services performed by students, (여기의 경우도 시간이 부족했다면 빼셔도 무방합니다.) I am firmly convinced that by conducting the community services, teenagers can learn that we cannot live alone, and human beings are not able to survive without supporting each other. As students are considered as the future core community members, those services should be the obligation of the school curriculum. |
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