Some educators believe that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often argued argues that children should learn a musical instrument.
Even though adults have to make various chances to experience many things, I strongly
believe they don’t (줄임말은 풀어써주세요!) have to learn for playing an instrument.
First of all, learning musical instrument is not practical. Unless
they want to be a musician, they do not need to learn it. Of course some
experts say children can learn many things such as creativity, meticulousness
through learning (의식하셨을지 모르겠지만, 너무 많이 쓰이고 있습니다.) instruments. However, not only it is it hard to prove it but also
they can improve these from things other than that. Therefore, they should rather learn other
things than learn how to play an instrument. Not only this, the lesson cost for
instrument is mostly expensive compared to other lessons such as sports, art,
etc.
From a negative perspective, learning how to play an
instrument is probably the greed of their parents. The reasons why they force
to learn instruments to their children to learn instruments are that they just want to see their children
is playing an instrument or the pressure from around. Among parents, there are
so many pressures. For instance, if some parents heard that music instruments
can helpful to improve their creativity, without doubt, they will compel their
children to do it. As the society became competitive, the pressure on children
increased. This can give a lot of stress to child.
To conclude, i I do not think that learning how to play instruments
can be helpful to children. However, unless they want to learn, adults have no
right to force them to learn.
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