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I strongly agree with people's opinion that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children's development than playing computer games. Playing computer games makes children funny (이거 학생들이 정말 많이 틀립니다. 이렇게 쓰면 '어린이들을 웃기게 만든다.'의 의미가 돼요.), but there are some disadvantages of their development. If children are enjoying computer games during 1 or 2 hours, it can be a good hobbies. However, usually do not stop after playing 1 or 2 hours they are not stopped computer games after they are playing computer games during 1 or 2 hours. They want to play more and more. This means that playing computer game is really addictive addicted. It can also affect is also affected to children's eyesight. If they are looking at a watching computer monitor for a so long time, they will be have poor eyesight as they are playing more computer games. Also, playing computer games affects to children's social ability. If they are playing computer games in the isolated place such as their room, they will have less contact with their friends and family so that children has fewer opportunity to learn about communication with people. (길게 쓰지 않으셔도 되니까 정확성에 집중해주세요! 만약에 얘를 살리실 거면 윗 문단과 합쳐주시면 되지만, 그냥 지우고 문법에 더 집중해주시는 게 좋습니다.) In contrast, outdoor Outdoor activities such as tennis and basketball make makes children active and communicative person. People can not live alone. Therefore, people learn how to live with other people who have different personality, culture and religion through communicative activities such as outdoor activities. If children are playing computer games and do not have a chance to do outdoor activities with other people, they will not learn this. Since outdoor activities, children's can move their body not sit down on the chair in the same position. Therefore, children's can physically developed through this.
For these reason, I strongly agree with the statement that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children's development than playing computer games. |