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Today, people work for too many hours, and this often becomes a problem. In this regard, it is often argued that they should have more holidays (정확히 따지고 들어가면, 단순히 여기서 그치는 게 아니라, 그러한 휴가를 부여하는 주체에 대한 설명이 이루어져야 합니다. 정부, 고용주 등 다양할 수 있기 때문이죠.). I also agree with them and will discuss the reason in this essay.
Actually, work and life balance of employees can only be possible when they can really enjoy their holiday. Nowadays it is very difficult to spend their free time well because they are always connected to their work both on and off line, and holidays and vacations have already lost its meanings. If they are given more free days, they will be able to enjoy what they like to do and forget about work.
Also, holidays of years are like doing exercise in the middle of a day, and it will be refreshing. Especially it is more important for the brain because overwork can exhaust it and this makes people unable to get the best result that they want. Thus, it will be helpful to leave the office on holidays to get back to work with better ideas.
In conclusion, workers should enjoy more holidays to work better. (여기의 경우도 서론과 같은 맥락으로 갑니다. 이렇게만 써도 7점 정도는 무리가 없지만, TR을 고려했을 때 더 정확한 표현은 '고용주들이~~~' 로 이루어져야 해요.) This is because it can be recharging and refreshing and that is all they need. |