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People living in modern society are more likely to spend time themselves compared to the people living in past. Due to many working hours, the more people cannot get free time at work the more people do not spend the time for someone. So, I strongly agree with the statement which people today care a lot less about others than ever before. To begin with, it is common that companies where an individual’s main income do not allow them to take a break at home where is the only place to get out of from work. Even some company forces workers to bring the tasks to finish as much as possible without extra paying, which happen often. Not surprisingly, indeed, the situation is widespread in Asian society such as Korea, Japan and China. As a result, this situation makes not only individual careless more but also being selfish. This is proven that people choose to spend most times for individual management activity rather than focusing time to others such as exercise, reading a book and travelling. As looking in social media, many people upload the way of how to learn new skills to improve themselves and make it a second income job. This means that even people take free time as a way to learn money. Self-management itself is beneficial but people have become more competitive. Therefore, there is more thing that they need to focus on than caring for others. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the social phenomenon that people nowadays do not take care less about other people due to their lack of time between work and individual life.
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