■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading

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This bar graph illustrates that global sales in three categories of (include 는 전체 중 일부를 나열할 때 쓰입니다. 여기는 전체 중 전체를 나열하니까 적절하지 않고요. 또한, 연도 관련해서도 적어주세요.)) which include games software, CDs and DVD or video. (이 밑에서 엔터키를 칠 필요는 없고, 그냥 이어주시면 돼요. 엔터키는 문단이 구분될 때에만 사용해주세요. 밑의 문단들에도 마찬가지입니다. 점수에 들어가는 사항이므로 주의해주세요.)
Units were measured in billion dollars.

Overall, The figures for games software and DVD/video steadily grew up during the period. However, there were nearly no changes in CDs category over the period. (약간의 감소로 보시는 게 맞습니다.)

we can see one interesting thing in this graph. (Task 1에서는 이유불문 1인칭 사용 금지입니다. 대체해주시면 되는데, 혹시 어떻게 바꿔야할지 모르시겠다면 댓글 주시면 도와드릴게요!) The sales of CDs were always the highest item over 4-year period.
Also, there is another noticeable feature in this chart, which is related to DVD/video.
The figure for DVD/video approximately doubled from 2000 to 2004 (숫자를 틀리지 않도록 주의해주셔야 합니다.).
In 2000, the sales of DVD/video were nearly a half of that for CDs but global sales of both Cds and DVD/video reached nearly equal point in 2004.

At the beginning of the period(2000), the sales amount in CDs category accounted for more than 50% among three categories, however this pattern was broken after one year. (어떻게 바뀌었는지를 적어주셔야겠죠.)

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우선 문단, 줄 정리가 급선무입니다. 엔터키는 딱 문단이 구분될 때에만 두 번 눌러주시고, 이 외의 경우에는 엔터 없이 그냥 스페이스바로 연결하면 돼요. 지금처럼 문장이 끝날 때마다 줄을 바꿔서 작성하지 않도록 신경써주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)