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Some people say that the best way to solve
a bad situation is to accept it, whereas others believe trying to improve such
conditions is more beneficial. While acknowledging that acceptance of the awful
situation is one of the efficient ways to overcome any hardships, I believe
people can improve their psychological value in terms of how they think and act thinking and how they
act.
In this era of modernization, people
nowadays have thousands of decisions to make every other day. Thus, early
acceptance is not only helpful for people to have a state of mental well-being,
but it also benefits them from avoiding trouble. (->>> 이 이후부터는 사실 큰 의미가 없는 반복이기 때문에, 그냥 예시 없이 일반론으로만 쭉 써보세요! 이는 밑의 문단, 그리고 다른 글들도 마찬가지입니다.) My older sister was eager to
enter a design company which is famous these days. Although she made such an
effort to join that firm before failing four interviews, she could not make it
due to a lack of a school degree. Sadly, she had a mental disorder, and now,
she is supposed to take two pills a day.
People trying to improve the situation
better is certainly prominent as they can develop a psychological mindset -
growth mindset. Individuals with this mindset believe their talents can be
acquired through hard work, efforts, and good strategies. I was the one who
detests mathematics; thus, I tried to avoid it whenever I got exams. After
having advice from my parents and teachers, I tried to solve this awful
situation, and now, I am in the first place in my school. (여기 예시도 마찬가지입니다. 그냥 예시 없이 가세요!)
In conclusion, people aware of problems and
accept that terrible situation is considered. (여기는 문장이 살짝 꼬였는데, 의도하신 바에 대해 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.)However, they can improve their
ability to develop a growth mindset, and it can make people go one step further
to be successful.
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