The table and bar chart indicates information about a country’s income from export five different categories in 2015 and in 2016. Overall,
it is noticeable that most products showed an upward trend especially textiles
had a significant increase except for Gems (소문자 시작입니다.) and jewellery during the period
shown.
As clearly seen from the chart, the
revenues of textiles went up dramatically with a figure of 15.24% from 2015 to
2016 by achieving over 30 billion dollars in 2016 while other industries showed
less than 10% of an the increase. Also, engineered goods rose by 8.5% and it reached over
60 billion dollars in 2016. Petroleum products and Agricultural (얘도 소문자 시작입니다.) products also demonstrated a small increase with 3% and 0.81% respectively. Lastly,
germs and jewellery was the only industry which were the only product showed a minus during the period by
decreasing 5.18% and the amount of money was approximately 2 billion. (이거 계산, 즉 얼만큼 떨어졌는지는 계산하실 필요 없습니다. 심지어 계산했다가, 피곤해서 집중 못하는 채점관에게 걸려서 다른 의도로 오해받을 수도 있고요.)
총평: (6/7/7/6) 6.5
위에서 말씀드렸듯이 수학 계산은 여러모로 도박이기 때문에 그냥 하지 마시고, 40 billion dollars 정도로 떨어졌다고만 적으시면 됩니다.
또한, 지금 단순히 각 수치가 어떻게 변했는지 적는데에 그치지 않고, 각 수지가 연도 내에서 어느정도의 위치를 차지하는지 보이면 좋습니다. 가령 textiles는 괄목할만한 성장을 이뤘지만, 여전히 절대적으로는 수입이 가장 낮은 상황이죠.
수고하셨습니다 :)