*목표점수 : 6. 5
*시험일 : 10. 25.
* 올해 초에 잠깐 공부하다가 6개월 넘게 영어공부 못하고 다시 작성해보니 너무 어렵네요 ㅠㅠ.. 시간 재지 않고 템플릿 참고하여 작성했습니다. 다시 시작하는 공부인 만큼 화이팅 해보려 합니다. 도움주셔서 감사합니다!
1.
Some people say that all
young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this.
Some
people believe that not all of youths must be full-time students. However, I
suppose all teenagers need to get full-time education until they turn to 18. Because
they have rights to have an equal opportunity to be educated whether they are
rich or poor and it prevents young people from turning to a bad direction.
(제가 해드린 것처럼, 문단을 구분할 때에는 엔터키를 두 번 쳐주세요!)
To
begin with, it is important to give the youth that giving youths opportunities of learning
equally in today's democratic society. Adolescents have rights to study whether they
have money or not for making a right choice for their life. According to some
studies, education helps young people to get a decent job. This leads all of
citizens can have the rights to enjoy a good quality of life.
On
top of that, staying at school prevents teenagers from getting into an
unwholesome place or job. Since they are lacking in judgement or forethought,
they can easily turn to the wrong direction. Teachers in school can guide them to a
right path for living, lead to find them their aptitude and help to build an upright character.
To sum up, full-time education provides
equal opportunity to live a good quality of life and guide the right career for
youths. For these reasons, it is clear that all teenagers should be full-time
students until the age of by ages 18.
총평: (5/6/7/6) 6.0
문법이나 어휘 등은 적어도 6.5 선에서는 크게 문제 없었습니다. (그렇다고 해서 문법+어휘 공부가 필요하지 않다는 말은 아닙니다. 이건 어떤 학생이든 꼭 해야하는 거에요.) 템플릿이나 시간 측정도 지금 당장은 괜찮습니다. 감을 익히실 때까지는 템플릿 쓰시고 그 이후에 차차 줄여주시면 되고, 시간도 시험 당일까지만 40분으로 단축시킬 수 있으면 돼요.
대신 분량은 문제가 됩니다. 분량의 경우는 당장 다음에 올리시는 글부터 안정적으로 270~80자가 확보될 수 있도록 연습해주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)