In the future, more
people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad
on holiday.
Do you agree or
disagree.
Transportation
technology development has had a lot of influence on the mankind history of mankind. In the
past, moving to another country took a great deal of time and cost, even
risking someone's life. However, people can go safely within 24 hours at the
cost today. Despite convenient methods, there are arguments that people will
choose to go on holiday in their own country, not travel abroad. In this essay,
I agree with this opinion and in this essay, will explain why I support this in this essay.
The fundamental reason (뭐에 대한 이유인지를 다시 한번 상기시켜주시면 좋습니다.) is that the curiosity
about foreign countries has faded. In the age of discovery, the curiosity
leaded people to go overseas. However, due to information technology, people can
get acknowledgement and experience at home about oversea culture or lifestyle
through internet or YouTube. Moreover, because Because of urbanization and westernization,
the way of living is becoming similar in both east and west, For these reasons
make people less and less feel the need to go abroad.
The second reason is that fraud or other
crimes with locals. Although English has become the most widely spoken language
in the world, in some countries, only a few people can speak properly. By exploiting this point, some
local people over-value their products to foreigners or even use them for
crimes, eventually, victims regret coming to tour abroad, and usually share
their cases on the Internet internet such as Google. These things make people prefer
relatively safe and reliable domestic travel.
The last reason is for domestic economic
growth. In the tourism industry, visits
by foreigners are important, but simultaneously, visits by locals are
important. Besides, there are also places where domestic people visit is more
important than that foreigners. In order to local growths, the government offer
advantages to local such as supporting festivals or highways fee. These
benefits have many advantages for domestic travellers, which make them have no reason
to visit the overseas.
To sum up, Although although the advantages of
travelling abroad exist, these the aforementioned reasons will increasingly force travellers to
travel domestically instead of abroad in the near future,
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