In many countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them
Recently years, healthy In recent years, the average health and fitness of modern people is decreasing diminished and average weight is increasing. It is a serious problem of nowadays people. In this regard, it will be meaningful to discuss the reason for this what is the problem and how this situation can be solved.
There are several some cause of this problem. The main reason is that people mainly live a do sedentary life style by development of technology. For example, nowadays people work by using a while using computer. So they do not move around too much. Such a lifestyle as life style is not capable to fill the average of exercise time . Another way cause is that nowadays people are consuming a unhealthy food processed food more than ever before. For instance, junk (글 전반적으로 여기 포함 띄어쓰기 오류가 꽤 있습니다. 일단 없다고 가정하고 채점하겠으나, 실전에서는 다르니까 주의해주세요!) food and processed canned have become extremely popular in order to people’s chronic busyness. Such as problems will aggravate the health healthy of modern people.
Nevertheless, I will suggest a several measures for solving the problems. Firstly, the government should build infrastructures such as as far as fitness or gym for nowadays people who live a do sedentary life style. As well as Furthermore (As well as라는 이 표현은 접속사로 쓰지 않습니다. 학생들이 되게 헷갈려하는 건데, 만약에 헷갈리시면 그냥 아예 가용 범위에서 배제해버리세요. 안 쓰면 틀릴 일도 없습니다.), if facility what such as gym and fitness will be built builded for general people, the public should take time to exercise public should be taken time what easily able to exercise. If so, it will be affect in to physical strength enhancement. Secondly, advertisement related danger of junk food have to be periodically showed to nowadays people. Then, public will be able to reduce intake because they know that junk food is not healthy due to they know that junk food is not health.
In conclusion, although modern people’s fitness and healthy has been decreased we can resolve the problems using used various ways.
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