안녕하세요 선생님! 9월 26일에 시험을 앞두고 있는 학생입니다.
항상 혼자서만 공부해보다가 선생님을 알게 되어서 이렇게 첨삭을 부탁드립니다.
이 글을 쓰는데에는 20분 걸렸고 저의 목표 overall은 6.5이며 라이팅에서의 목표는 5.5나 6.0입니다.
아직 부족한거 같지만 첨삭부탁드립니다. 감사합니다!
The chart presents how many tourists visit a particular Carbbean island from 2010 to 2017. Overall, since 2010, the number of people who visit the island was increased until 2017.
According to the graph, the visitors who stay on island were reached the peak from 2014 and 2015 and decreased to around 1.3 million, while the amount of visitors who stay on cruise ships was continued to go up to 2017. After 2015, the number of visitors staying on island was equal to that of visitors staying on cruise with about 1.4 million and then the people who stay on cruise ships was sharply risen by 2017, and the number of visitors stayed on island was overtaked by that stayed on cruise ships.
On the other hand, the total figure of visitors to Caribbean island was increased steady by around 2.5 million, and between 2016 and 2017, it was grown dramatically by about 0.8 million.
총 155자, 20분 소요하였습니다.
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