안녕하세요, task2 첨삭 부탁드립니다.
시간은 36분 정도 걸렸고 250자입니다. 글자는 더 늘려보도록 연습하겠습니다 ㅠㅠ
12월 시험 예정이고 목표점수는 7점입니다.
task2 도 많이 댕겨서 풀어보기 시작했습니다. 감사합니다:)
In these days, many young people are under a lot of pressure to work and they do not enjoy their spare time. There are several reasons why they have to work during their studies.
First, tuition fees for international students are quite expensive. Numerous universities accept the students from abroad, but only a few universities provide them with scholarships enough. Sometimes, the tuition fees for international pupils are 5 more times expensive than domestics’. Therefore, they have to work a lot in order to keep studying their majors. Not only for the international students, but also the domestic students also struggle to keep their studies in financial reasons. In many cases, students do not get fully supported from their parents financially. Likewise, they need to reduce their times for leisure activities and fill these out with their part time jobs. It distracts the students to not focus on their studies.
However, there are a couple of feasible solutions can be suggested. One of the suggestions is that the countries have to support them financially in various way. For example, they can directly support the students with money or assist the universities to increase the scholarships for their students. In addition, it also affects to down the tuition fees. Moreover, the students will concentrate to their majors and it will be more beneficial to the countries themselves in a long term.
In a summary, I strongly believe that the nations have to provide both students include international and universities with financial support.