Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
some mankind believes There are those who believe that school pupils
can increase their academic ability when they study in groups, but many
teaching professionals assert that adolescents should study alone. Personally, I believe
that it is better for children to study in groups.
On the one hand, innumerable teaching
professionals argue that students should study on their own. However I do not
agree with this statement. This is due to the fact that when students study in
groups, they could be easily tempted by a lot of enticements like friends and
appointments that they make during studying in groups. In addition, I would
like to (양산님께서 서/결론에서 그룹 공부를 긍정하신 상황입니다. 그런데, '개인 공부를 강조해야하는' 이 문단에서 1인칭을 이용하게 되면 서/결론에서 제시한 나의 의견과 충돌하게 되고, 이로 인해 글을 읽는 독자들에게 I의 의견에 대해 엄청난 혼돈을 주게 됩니다. 저 역시 순간 당황했고요.) they opine that studying in groups could have detrimental impact of children
since they are likely to rely on their colleagues without any efforts. For example,
there are some occasions that a few introverted school pupils tend to avoid studying
in groups. For these reasons mentioned above, studying alone is not that
effective.
On the other hand, there are two reasons
why I believe that school pupils should study in groups. In terms of gathering
information, they can save more time and even gather more information than when
they search information alone. In While doing so, they can use economized time for
other purposes like getting some rest. At the same time, adolescents can raise
their sense of belonging during studying in groups. I believe that it is
significant for school pupils to learn academic subjects like mathematics,
science and English, but it is also important for them to acquire a sense of
belonging by participating in group study. For instance, adolescents who have
never been studied in groups are likely to become self- centered adults, but
when it comes to altruistic adults, they tended to participate in group study
on a regular basis.
In conclusion, there are convincing arguments on both method of study, but I believe that the advantages of studying in groups outweigh the drawbacks.
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1. 6.5 점이 목표입니다!
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네 양산님, 반갑습니다! 독학하느라 고생이 많으시네요~적어도 라이팅에 있어서는 제가 물심양면 열심히 도와드리겠습니다.
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