Some believe that installing CCTVs in high crime areas will held to reduce crime.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Many people believe that installation of CCTVs in high crime areas reduces criminals. However, there are some people who assert that CCTVs cause other problems in society. It has been a contentious issue since it has advantages like prevention of crime, while at the same time, there are it has disadvantages about invasion of privacy.
Firstly, installation of CCTVs can make society safer and more secured. It is a well-known fact that the use of surveillance cameras declines the probability of crime. Also, when criminals commit crime, the records of CCTVs can be an important evidence. For instance, people can live in the high crime areas as they have a belief that cameras would prevent potential dangers (범죄에 대한 직접적인 동의어가 있는 건 아니지만, 이런 식의 대체도 충분히 가능합니다.) crime and become a proof for unexpected incident. It clearly shows that CCTVs are helpful to insure citizens a safe society.
Nevertheless, there are possibilities that CCTVs can be used for negative purposes. Some people believe that surveillance cameras can become a method for illegal control of individuals. As the cameras record certain areas for 24hours, the videos contain privacies of citizens. If the records are leaked to outside of public establishments, at worst, people can be threatened of by their personal lives. This shows that it It is evident that installation of cameras has high possibility of abuse.
To sum up, CCTVs contribute to the security of society and prevention of crime. However, we have to consider its negative influences on our privacies.
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