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Nowadays, the proportion of western children who are obese has increased by approximately 20% since the last ten years. There are several reasons of this problem, and it can have negative effect on children’s health.
There are several causes of growing obese children in western society in the last ten years. One of the main causes is that lots of children who live in the western society eat junk food such as hamburger and french fries. When there was no junk food in the past, children in the past tended to have meals which were made by their parents. Thus, children in the past is much healthier than children in the present. However, these days, it is possible to a number of western children would able to eat a variety of junk food. (앞에 같은 말을 하고 있는 문장이 있기 때문에 굳이 반복할 필요는 없습니다.) Another main reason can be that they don’t do not exercise actively because they use smartphones during their free time because of using smartphone to play. A lot of children are exposed to the Internet in contemporary time, they watch various videos and play a mobile game using their parent’s phone or their own phone. Also, lots of parents in the western society allow their children to play with their phone because smartphone is the best most helpful tool in order to calm their children especially in the outside. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.)
This trend would bring about several negative impacts to children’s health. First of all, an unhealthy lifestyle in which children eat a lot of junk food causes an imbalance in the nutrients that youngsters consume to imbalanced nutrient. They would intake a lot of harm nutrients like cholesterol and would accumulate fat in their blood when they eat a lot of junk food a lot. Therefore, they go through the shortage of the essential and good nutrients such as protein and vitamin. Secondly, not to exercise triggers to a variety of health problems, for example, heart-related problem and diabetes. Workout is of great benefit to keep health to a person regardless of age. However, if they don’t (줄임말을 사용하지 말아주세요~) exercise because they are too busy of playing with their phone for long hours, they become obese and unhealthy people in an instant.
In conclusion, rising the population of obese children is caused by several factors, for instance, eating junk food and never exercising. Also, this problem might bring about serious impacts. Consequently, many western children have to eat healthy food which consists of beneficial nutrients on body instead of eating junk food and do diverse exercise on a regular basis. (제언은 논제에서 요구하는 사항이 아닙니다.) |