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The chart shows illiteracy rates by region and by gender in 2000. ('예측치' 라는 점을 언급해주셔야 합니다.)
Overall, it is clear that females had higher more ('많음' 과 '높음' 은 구분해주셔야 해요.) illiteracy rates than men all over the world. Furthermore, developing countries such as Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia had higher proportion of illiteracy rates than those of other developed countries.
If you see the graph more closely (Task 1에서는 이유불문 2인칭이 사용되어서는 안 됩니다.), one can see that developed countries had less than 2 percent illiteracy rates in both men and women. Furthermore, both Latin America/Caribbean men and East Asia/Oceania men showed less than 10 percent illiteracy rates. Also, their female counterparts had less than 20 percent illiteracy rates. In contrast, in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia, males had around 30 percent illiteracy rates. Also, women showed around 50 percent high illiteracy rates in those countries.
In conclusion, generally, female had higher illiteracy rates than men in the world. Also, developing countries had much higher illiteracy rates than developed countries. (Overall 문단에서 했던 말을 그대로 반복하는 것은 아무런 의미를 가지지 않습니다. 이것을 대신해서 추가적인 분석을 해주셔야 해요.)
첨삭 부탁드립니다. 감사합니다.
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