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Title : In some countries marriages are arranged by the parents but in other countries, people choose their own marriage partner.
There is on doubt that marriage is one of the main thing in life. As hushands succeed, there will be an exceelent partner needed. In some countries, parents choose their daaaaughters' or sons' partners. on the other hand, in other countries there is no pressure to choose individual partners by their parents.
빨간색 문장은 조금 더 구체적으로 쓸 필요가 있는 것 같아요.
husband 보다는 partner가 좋겠구요~
To have a partner chosen by parents has many advantages. The partners could have a job which is an exxcellent such as a doctor, or CEO. It is not uncommon for people who have the partner chosen, by their parents to live abundantly especially with money. For shlitary people, they do not have to waste time to have relationships with a person who is going to be a partner.
빨간색 문장에 대한 구체적인 근거가 필요할 것 같아요. 꼭 부모님이 배우자를 선택하지 않아도 배우자의 직업은 훌륭할수가 있으니깐, 왜 그런 근거를 쓰셨는지에 대한 보충설명이 필요하겠네요~
Marriage is managed by the people who are going to marry in other countries. It takes all people in happiness because a marriage of delight comes from couples' love. What schould influence children better than the mood of the family? The hoals of marriage as mainly three hoals. Firstly, the ambience of the family should be blessed. Secondly, for children, the parents try to rear cleverly and healthward. Lastly, They have to have filial piety to their parents because their parents raised them successfully.
In conclusion it is perferred that marriage could be chosen by people themselves. Marriage is the most important affair. Parents will not be responsible life of daughters' and sons' of all. Parents should give them some advice, however, the selection belongs to young adults. The countries where the parents select the marriage thave to change the convention.
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