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It is a common belief that unpaid community
service should be a mandatory part of high school programmes. Although some
people say that it is a waste time for students to study hard, I personally
think that it helps students to live their life. To begin with, there are some people who
argue that students should concentrate on their study. In order words,
participating in the unpaid community service is time-consuming. For example,
many experts have consistently showed that many students study in all kinds of
subjects not only Maths but also English, because they want to enter the good
universities. (이거는 굳이 전문가 의견으로 연결짓지 않아도 충분히 전개가 가능합니다. 오히려 채점관들은 '전문가' 라는 표현을 보고 암기한 문장으로 간주해 감점을 할 위험도 있고요.) However, if schools may add to the unpaid community service to the curriculum,
students are would be less likely to spend their time studying hard. It is obvious that
participating in events can reduce study time. As a result, this has negative
effects on students. However, other people say that unpaid community
service leads to good impression on students because students can meet up with
new friends and people of various fields. This allows students to broaden their perspective. Also, students can learn a variety of areas either the academia or
practical skills. Moreover, they are able to get relationships with younger
children. For instance, many statistics have stated that students who
participated in the unpaid community service can obtain a lot of knowledge of
various fields and develop strong bonds with young children. this This is because students
listen to practical advice from local people and they teach some subjects to
young children (파란색과 초록색에 대해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.). In conclusion, I agree with this opinion (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상은 대명사로 서술해서는 안 됩니다.). Many
schools should take part in the unpaid community service as a compulsory part
of high school programmes.
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