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From the past, music has taken a large portion in people’s lives, so it cannot be easily detached from their everyday routines. Moreover, some people feel that music can be an effective way to gather people who have different cultural backgrounds and ages. Related to this opinion, I also personally agree that music has the power to bring different people together when regarding its the empathic and historical aspects of the music.
Firstly, music can act as a method for strengthening bonds among listeners who have totally different cultures and ages, as the music it can easily bring empathy regardless of the language used in that. To be specific, though sometimes the language used in the music cannot be understood by overseas listeners, they shared their feelings and unified together since the rhythm and melodies bring empathy among people. For example, a renowned Korean boy band BTS became famous worldwide, and tons of people who live outside of South Korea shared their comments about the songs online. In addition, regardless of their ages, these foreigner fans gathered in a concert hall, which is located in the capital of South Korea, to see the artists. This example clarifies that music can be a powerful tool to communicate and make a bond among different people.
Second, when it comes to historical aspects, classical music can also be a good example to show the potential strength of music to combine universal people together regardless of the era. Though classical music has started from the past more than 1000 years ago, modern people ranging from the old generation to young people still listen to this music and empathize to the ancestor’s feelings. Some musical experts have consistently stated that, when they have analyzed the historical data, there has been not a big difference of modern people’s thoughts and feelings towards classical music compared to that of medieval period people. This comment shows the transcendent aspects of the music.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that music has a significant role in bringing different people together when considering the characteristics of the music. Therefore, music will be highly used as a tool to make a bond among worldwide people in the future.
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