These days many people star to purchase their things through the internet such as book, air tickets and even groceries. Buying things they need in this way would be comfortable, but there will also be some drawbacks.
One evident benefit to using internet on purchase things is that internet allows to reduce their unnecessary time. People who living in modern society are way too busy so that they do not have the time to go to grocery store or some places which they can buy something they need. For those of people, internet offers benefit which is just looking the screen and pick something and then pay right away. In another case, internet shops often have a sale so that people can buy something by discounted charge. These two advantages shows that the shopping in this way would bring money and time to save.
On the other hand, there are obvious disadvantages to this situation. Firstly, people can not see the real picture of product that they will receive, so sometimes they may receive defective products or even fake. Secondly, internet shops using delivery service so that they can bring the goods to people. It means, people have to wait untill the delivery comes, while using the offline shop, they can get products right away. Sometimes, for example, food can be spoiled by this system.
In conclusion, while there are puls points to shopping thing they need by using internet, it seems the disadvantages of internet shop such as delivery issue or guarantee of products are outweighed the positive aspect of internet shop.
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