이미 2군데 학교는 시간이  없어서 교정없이 다 보내버렸지만.. 앞으로 남은 학교들을 위해;  평가가 필요해서 올립니다. pre-nursing지원이라 간호에 대해서 치우쳐버린 에세이가 아닐까 싶네요. (일단 college of liveral arts & sciences로 지원하긴 하지만...) 제가 지원하는 학교들은 대부분 essay 요구가 없어서 토픽도 정해지지 않았거든요. 그래서 제 생각하는대로 썼는데, 토플도 아니라 도통 에세이기준도 모르겠구 ㅠㅠ 잘못된 점등 잘된 점등 다 꼬집어 주시면 감사하겠습니다. 다시쓰라면 다시 쓸껍니다 ㅠ   A personal essay To go to see a dentist was one of my scary things at my early age. Since my weak teeth always bothered me for 2 and half years, I had to go to a university-hospital twice a week. While the 12-year-old girl was being scared before receiving a dental treatment or operation, one nurse took care of me with patience assisting beside a dentist and made me feel relief, saying “Don’t worry, it will be alright.” He was one of my favorite nurses in that ward and I thought nurses were skillful as doctors or dentists as well as warm-hearted as parents. As the early experiences made nurses impressive to me, I came to have an interest in medicine and nursing since my father, an oriental medicine doctor, helped me acquire much knowledge about medicine over all such as how to treat various patients with different symptoms and diseases. Also, there are specific other reasons. First of all, being a nurse was much more attractive than having any other jobs because I will be able to learn professional and formal knowledge on nursing that I’m really interested in. On top of that, in terms of practical aspects, I am oriented toward being a nurse since I know that it is relatively easy to be employed after gaining a nursing license. Finally, there will be many opportunities to interact with a lot of patients in a hospital. I see many nurses talking with their patients more frequently than doctors doing, which seems to make their tasks more enjoyable at work. I want to take part in many activities in school since I’m a sociable and active person. Also, I’m looking forward to studying nursing in the university, especially women’s health, dealing with stress and children’s diabetes. Furthermore, if it is possible, I would like to practice my skills based on acquired nursing knowledge by serving in poor towns or countries and such experiences in the future will allow me to learn from experiences and contact with realities. This is because I’m open-minded and I like to face diverse situations and environments. After graduation, I would have many options. If I want to study more, I will gain more degrees. I can also work as a registered nurse in the states or in my country. Otherwise, since my father has his own hospital, I can work with him later on. Consequently, I hope   I would be a proficient and prepared nurse in the future.